The life of a Jamaican girl.
Sugar, your eyes…those lips
Spice, your tongue, what a cute lisp
A Haiku too, Poetry 101 Rehab: Sugar.
Featured image by Nicholi Stevens.
Sugar and spice are the best ingredients of love <3 Your haiku captures the idea perfectly.
I’m glad you like it 🙂
I love this one even more – it’s really cute 🙂
It makes me think “Awwwwww….. <3”
Hehe thanks 🙂
I meant that literally 😉
I wanted to add that the only thing that could be improved is your very last word. Personally, I consider a poem’s last word very important for its meaning. Therefore, I would suggest using a stronger word than “nice” (naturally depending on what you intended to say).
I dont know maybe… “appealing”,”inviting”,”beautiful”,”sweet”, “tempting”,…
There are so many possibilites.
But keep it your style, because your writing style is amazing 🙂
Thank you for the advice, and I’m flattered that you like my writing style 🙂 I wanted to keep it with the theme, sugar, spice and everything nice, so I kept it simple.
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-Many Blessings, Rashida