Candy

Sugar, your eyes…those lips
Spice, your tongue, what a cute lisp
Everything Nice.

A Haiku too, Poetry 101 Rehab: Sugar.

Featured image by Nicholi Stevens.

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7 thoughts on “Candy

  1. I wanted to add that the only thing that could be improved is your very last word. Personally, I consider a poem’s last word very important for its meaning. Therefore, I would suggest using a stronger word than “nice” (naturally depending on what you intended to say).

    I dont know maybe… “appealing”,”inviting”,”beautiful”,”sweet”, “tempting”,…
    There are so many possibilites.

    But keep it your style, because your writing style is amazing πŸ™‚

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